March 5 - Writing is a process, and the first draft is rarely perfect. Strong writers improve their work through revision. After reviewing and revising your literary argument paragraph, what changes did you make to strengthen your writing?

Response: When reviewing and revising my literary argument paragraph, some changes I added to my writing were grammar mistakes, rewriting my analysis, and changing the way I inserted my quotes. I ended up having to change the way I inserted my quotes into the text but it was no big deal. I had also corrected a couple simple grammar mistakes which was easy. The hardest part was fixing the analysis of the quotes I inserted into my writing. My analysis kept straying away from the claim and evidence that I provided, and I had to focus on getting rid of some filler words.

Summary: Today, we revised our practice body paragraphs. 

Reflection: Revising your writing and admitting your mistakes can be a difficult but crucial step to writing a well thought out essay.

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